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如何在短期内提高雅思写作?

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这个问题要分为2个层次来回答:

一, 6分以内提高到6分:

要解决三大问题:

STEP ONE:语法问题:


里推荐100句常见语法和20组中国考生最常见的语法修改示范,其实一位同学犯的语法错误,总是那几个,比如介词没搞懂,那么介词就是你永远跨越不了的
坎;如果动词时态没搞清楚,那么写书信,写大作文的例子的时候就特别容易出错;还有,双谓语甚至无动词;无主语句子;时态的乱用
;动词搭配问题,6复合句的乱用;副词的使用;倒装句的乱用;后置状语和前置状语;主谓不一致等等,常见的错误也就这么多;多加提防;

 

这里列举了前三组带有解析的语法分析:

第一组:介词短语后面不接动词原形以及完整的句子

1, Talking too much but doing too few gives rise to make others a
terrible impression.

正确形式:Talking too much but doing too few
gives rise to a terrible impression.

错误解析:因为give rise to 是介词短语,后面是不能接动词的,所以必须要修改为名词形式,直接去掉make
others.

2, This above phenomenon can be explained by we change our attitudes
towards the lifestyles and by we lose interests on local history of indigenous
people.

正确形式:This above phenomenon can be explained
by changing attitudes towards the lifestyles and by losing interests on local
history of indigenous people.

错误解析:因为by 是介词短语,后面是不能接动词的,所以必须要修改为名词形式或者动名词形式,直接将change
lose 改为changing losing.

3, When it comes to ask the questions about the clear definitions of
education and career success. People always hold divergent viewpoints.

正确形式:When it comes to the clear
definitions of education and career success, people always hold divergent
viewpoints.

错误解析:因为when it comes to是介词短语,后面是不能接动词的,所以必须要修改为名词形式或者动名词形式,直接去掉ask
the questions,是多余的成分。另外when 引导的只是一个从句,后面需要真正的主句进行支撑,所以要把people小写。

4, I still fail to pass the IELTS despite I have already collected
pencils with 9 kinds of colors.

正确形式:I still fail to pass the IELTS
despite pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

错误解析:因为despite是介词短语,后面是不能接动词或者句子的,可以将其修改为名词形式或者动名词形式,将句子:I
have already collected pencils with 9 kinds of colors. 调整为:pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

5Many fans are crazy about love affairs of Hanhana well-known Chinese writer, despite
they know that he is a playboy.

正确形式:Many fans are crazy about love
affairs of Hanhana well-known Chinese writer, despite that they know that he is
sometimes a playboy.

错误解析:因为despite是介词短语,后面是不能接动词或者句子的,除了可以将句子修改为名词形式或者动名词形式,也可以将despite 修改为:despite that . 另外韩寒并不是总是playboy,所以加上sometimes.

6, Many
students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite they have understood
the negatives of illhealth effects.

正确形式: Many students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite the
negatives of illhealth effects.

错误解析:介词不是连词,一般后面只接名词或者具备名词性质的短语或者带连词的宾语从句,因此不能加句子。常见错误有:”despite,in spite of , during, because of , due to”, 也不能后接动词。

7, Many poor
citizens always depend on the rich give support.

正确形式: Many poor citizens always depend on supports of the rich.

错误解析:介词不是连词,一般后面只接名词或者具备名词性质的短语或者带连词的宾语从句。不能接动词或者句子。

8, Life
disorder can lead to damage an individual’s health.
正确形式:
Life disorder can lead to health recession of an individual.

错误解析:“to”在某些情况下,(如词组“giverise to , contribute to , pay attention to , conform to , lead
to”)都是介词短语+名词或者动名词。

9, Nobody
could deny the importance of environment protection , for the simple reason is
that it is of far-reaching significance in the future .

正确形式: Nobody could deny the importance of environment protection, for
its far-reaching significance in the future.

错误解析:特殊的介词,如:”forsince, after, before”在大部分时候都是介词,不接完整的句子。

10, Individuals
have different attitudes towards for the definition of happiness.

正确形式:Individuals have different attitudes towards the definition of happiness.

错误解析:介词后面不能再接介词。注意一些比较特殊的介词如:towards

介词短语加了句号错误表达: With the society develops. people begin to realize the
importance of biological balance.

正确形式:With
the development of society, people begin to realize the importance of
biological balance.(介词短语不是句子,不能加句号)

第二组一句话不能有2个动词,也不能没有谓语动词。

11It is advertising makes customers buysomething impulsively.

正确形式:It is advertising that makes
customers buy something impulsively.

错误解析:因为 is makes 都是动词,所以该句话有2个动词,需要去掉一个动词,本句中可以把makes 前面增加that,这样后面就是定于从句了。
从而该句就只有一个动词。

12There is a research shows thatmany parents are depend on teachers
give support.

正确形式:There is a research showing that many
parents are depending on teachers who give support.

错误解析:本句的错误太多,主要是谓语动词太多,要记住一个主句只能有一个位于动词,而一个从句也只能有一个谓语动词。而主句中的isshow就是多一个重复了,而从句中:are ,depend, give都是动词,而只能有一个动词。

13ere was a famous Chinesebook describe a monkey , a pig , a sand monk
and a true monk go to west forpilgrimage.

,确形式:There was a famous Chinese book describing a monkey , a pig , a sand
monk and a true monk go to west for pilgrimage.

错误解析:要记住一个主句只能有一个谓语动词,而一个从句也只能有一个谓语动词。而主句中的was describe就是多一个重复了,需要将describe 修改为:describing 作为后置定语。

14e number of the populationwas decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure
of population was increased inthe years of 1996 and 2000, the data was then
continue increase in the last 5years.

正确形式:The number of the population
decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure of population increased in the years
of 1996 and 2000, and the data was then continuously increasing in the last
5years.

错误解析:要记住一个主句只能有一个谓语动词,而该句中的谓语动词太多,
所以需要去掉was
并且将最后一个分句中的was
then continue increase 中的continue改成副词continuously, decrease 改成was decreasing.

15I earned the money is the least.

正确形式:I earned the least money.或者my income was the least.

16was
a wolf come from Nanjing.

正确形式:I was a wolf coming from Nanjing.

17ow there are always many new things come out every day.

正确形式:Now there are
always many new things coming out every day.

18
谓语动词:

错误表达:There
have many people believe that mobile phones are useful.

正确表达:There
are many people who believe that mobile phones are useful.

错误解析:(不存在There have的形式,而且There be结构后不能再加谓语动词。)

第三组:逗号不能够连接2个完整的句子

19There are plenty ofuniversities in China , most of that are not good
enough.

正确形式:There are plenty of universities in
China , most of which are not good enough. There are plenty of universities in
China and most of that are not good enough. / There are plenty of universities
in China; most of that are not good enough. /There are plenty of universities
in China .Most of which are not good enough.

错误解析: 逗号不能连接2个完整的句子。所以需要将其中一个句子变成从句,或者使用分号或者句号来代替逗号。

20cry , you cry.

正确形式:I cry; you cry. / I cry and you cry.
/ I cry. You cry.

21, We all tried our best,however, we lost the game.

正确形式:We all tried our best. However, we
lost the game./ We all tried our best; however, we lost the game.

错误解析:即使是however,也不能连接前后都是完整的句子,因为however是副词,只有and but 2个连接词才可以连接2个完整的句子。

22 China has achieved great prosperity ,however ,its culture
suffered a lot.

正确形式:China has achieved great prosperity
.However ,its culture suffered a lot./China has achieved great prosperity;
however,its culture suffered a lot.

错误解析:注意这点和单独的however, 将一个句子的主语和谓语动词隔开的句子有本质的区别。比如:students,
however, always expect their high praise from parents and teachers. 该句中是一个句子,所以可以用however 将主语和谓语分开。

23They always feel boring about visiting some places where they are no fresh and no extremely attractive
talking pointstherefore, local museums and historical sites cannot be drawn
into much discussion as they are without cartoons, movie stars and sports.

正确形式:They always feel boring about
visiting some places where they are no fresh and no extremely attractive
talking points.Therefore, local museums and historical sites cannot be drawn
into much discussion as they are without cartoons, movie stars and sports.

错误解析: 注意 therefore, on the other hand, on the contrary 这些类似的词组或者副词都是副词成分,并不能连接前后都是完整的句子。所以需要修改为:
将逗号改为句号或者分号。

24, Student s are always tired of sitting in the classroom
for a whole morning, thus show their resentment
with the current teaching method.

正确形式:Student s are
always tired of sitting in the classroom for a whole morning, and thus show
their resentment with the current teaching method.

错误解析:thus 照样是插入语,是副词成分,不是连接词,所以不能连接前后都是完整的句子。

2STEP TWO:

当语法没有问题的时候,(260字的大作文+小作文150字)总共语法错误不超过5个,这个要求不高吧?一般是要么错一大片,要么就懂了,然后就好很多。

然后就是要解决另外一个很核心的问题,就是细化思维的问题;

 

 

通过细化思维来将题目进行有逻辑的流畅展开,并且的确是展开话题用的,是写作得分的关键。

 

当考官看到类似,万能开头:With the development of...的时候,想必一定会皱眉头。
也许只有中国人会用吧。那为什么像类似的开篇:with the development
of society and economy, there are more and more//increasing number of //
the topic is a hotly-debated one, which arose our passion
towards the…, 然后再写一波大的背景,然后开始写作文切入的话题,这种思路严重破坏了雅思作文的评分标准(CC) 连贯性的问题。所以作文的开篇就必须要是直接切入话题(通过细化思维的描述,然后表明自己的观点即可。)

中文追求高语境文化容易宏观化一些概念,也就是很大很空的话,类似于新闻联播的发言稿。高中的作文的时候,写的越大,不接地气,越云里雾里的文章,越能拿高分。这些华丽的躯壳并没有严谨的逻辑。所以细化思维的训练是非常重要的训练,这个也可以从很多剑桥雅思后面的范文中可以看到。

所以英文写作一定要细,要写清楚。有多细呢?我举个例子。比如一篇金钱和幸福的关系,优秀的英文逻辑就是:有了钱我可以买车,有了车生活会更方便,生活方
便了我的幸福指数就会提高。无懈可击的逻辑,perfect!然而中国人有可能会这样写:"Being rich could boost one's materialistic happiness. Moreover, it
could..."语法单词基本都没问题,但是写了等于没写......什么是materialistic
happiness?我们都知道中文是物质幸福,看似也很高大上。然而西方人的人脑回路是无法直接get到的.你必须要clarify it。这些所谓很好并且很复杂的想法并不足以说清楚这些观点。所以大家要记得要将自己的理性和智商同步下降,这样才能达到英国人的水平和高度。

 

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